Barry John Terblanche here. I’m a screenwriter of 7 years with 16 high-end scripts, I write across all genres to features, TV pilot/series, and shorts. As a career, I’m a freelance screenplay competition reader/feedback/coverage/judge-report writer for a good few well-known companies. Competition companies aside, I offer my service to all that want a professional read and detailed analysis report on their screenplay. As a screenplay writer myself, I know that sometimes what you really need is someone to give it to you straight – no bull!
I’m not a script consultant... a consultant will give you a few pages of notes of what works and what doesn’t, and that’s the end of the relationship – thanks for your bucks. If you want to question his notes then that’ll cost extra. I’m an analyst... I analyse your script and give you a detailed 5+ page analysis/feedback report that will critique your project, as well as provide recommendations on how to improve what you’ve written, and our relationship does not end here! It starts here... you may want clarification to some points in my notes? No problem, highlight such with any questions and or advice you may be seeking and I’ll answer you back at no extra cost. If again you have any questions or seek advice on that, then again follow through as above – no extra cost. I will go back and forth with you as many times as needed for you to understand the notes I’ve given.
My (our) objective here is to build a professional and understanding relationship between ourselves... not just on the first script you send me, but all the other scripts you have written, better still the ones you yet to write. As a first time client of mine, I’ll create I file in your name, in which your script and all notes are stored under the script title... same with your second script... third, and so on. I use this to cross-reference your past scripts/notes against the new one you send me, this allows not only me, but YOU to see how your writing is improving, or not! Or not - is where we see you continually making mistakes, this allows me to discuss these issues with you in greater depth. And again, there is no extra charge. Now, this all don’t mean I’m a stupid businessman... my financial gain is your good word of mouth that will bring me more clients. Cause, if you bad mouth my service then I’m to blame and would have shot myself in the foot!
Let’s get your script into something that you’ll not only be proud of but can confidentially send out into the marketplace.
My analysis report will cover the following; Concept/originality – structure – storyline – theme/plot – pacing – characters – dialogue – tone – conflict/emotion – personal investment – marketplace potential – production value – final comments.
I’ll be happy to send you an example of a past analysis report I’ve done.
You’ll find my rates well below the market rate.
Script: 2 Page analysis/feedback: 5+ Page full analysis/coverage:
Short/TV 30min $28 $48
Feature/TV 60min $38 $58
Barry John Terblanche
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